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Starship...

Obi-wan is a reminder
of great light-saber play
with my old friend Jess
Sadly, he has gone on
to the great Death-Star
in the vast reaches of Space

I wonder, if we shall meet again?
For he was not of a mind
that there is anything beyond
this mortal coil
I believe however, there is more
more than our pitiful lives
reaching for the stars from our ladders
here on Earth

As I lie here contemplating
my own lonely journey in the future
I realize that, having the experience
of good friendship and a rich history
is mainly the reason for not wanting
to end this journey here; to start anew
Though we haven't a choice

So I choose to think of it as starting
a new adventure, going where many a person
has gone before, but refused to come back
to let us know, because it is so awesome!
Because they wish to let us discover
such a wonderful thing for ourselves!
If indeed, we are to meet again
We will have a good laugh, and I will tell him
I told you so! And he will reply;
"Yeah, but I wasn't about to let you know that you were right!"

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Comments

From what little I knew of him,
I found him to be a capable and risible old bastard
with an insight as to what constitutes original thought and poetry.

One would hope that he was wrong in his assumption that "this is it"!!
and, upon finding himself prostrate at the big blokes feet,
gave a pointed critique of, God's. Dress sense and choice of sneakers.

Obi.

that is what he would do! He would most likely also ask: "Who put you in charge?"
~ Geez.
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I believe however, there is more
say straight GEE
you only in hearsay believe

for actuality why not ask lovedly
jess did finally
none did he ever meet
dressed or naked

else he would have come to kick me
like a football
o my dear GEE

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