The wars around their souls is not near as fierce as the wars over their souls. I think this is type trochaic?.....stan

some of these are so good, I enjoyed your thym also. I am truly learning. me I'm just winging it.
Well done, impressive!

Eddie
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in every line except the first you have five feet per line! That's really good. I've jotted down the break up on paper and line six is perfect iambic pentameter:) (at I think so:p)!

There are a few mix-up though (usually in the middle of each line) between trochees and iambs.

Because of my limited net usage at the moment I can't get the break up to you until Monday or Tuesday. If you'd like it sooner, please pm me your email tonight and I'll scan you the page I jotted it down on to you.

Well-done!

I can't get round the parsing. Actually, I'm afraid to try. I'll just settle for the theme instead. Obviously dark, with a bit of longing hope lingering at the end.

The reading was smooth even without much punctuation. The meter looked consistent to me. Your saying iambic pentameter lets me see one clearly in line two:

"Floating above an endless world of hate" and five.
"Disease and hunger steal their life away"

The poem's a lament, but it's not a drag. (Most people's lamentations turn out to be). Not long, but to the point.

"Round orbs/ of light/ swirl in/ the dark/ night sky"
so far what I have learned after speaking to Jess on Skype. is the iambic pantameter reads like this,
da Dum, da Dum, da Dum da dum, da Dum.
In your first line your "swirl in" the stress is really on the swirl and not the in. according to what i've learned so far it can't be that way. to be sure I will ask Jess to look at it. I could be wrong, I don't think so.
i am having the same problem with line four, let me say that it seems as if you used different meter on some and another on the others. maybe this is not iambic pantameter, then can you tell me what it is because i am getting confused here. to much going on in this one, the thought in this is great as I said earlier. now that a little understanding of meter has invaded my brain, I seem to look at it according to the parameters of the workshop.
Eddie
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Round orbs/ of light/ swirl in/ the dark/ night sky [iambic pentameter]
Floating/ above/ an end/less world/ of hate [a trochee then 4 iambs]
Their light/ absolves/ all fear/ of youth/ful death [iambic pentameter]
The wars/, they rage/ around/ our child/ren's souls [iambic pentameter]
Disease/ and hung/er steal/ their life/ away [iambic pentameter]
Here in/ this war/ torn world/ no one/ is safe [iambic pentameter]
Children/ look to/ these strange/ orbs for/ comfort [trochaic pentameter!]
Hoping/ that when/ they die/ they will/ go there [a trochee then 4 iambs]

See how it works? the biggest trap for young players is finding an unstressed first syllable for the line, that's where you erred in lines 2 and 7. Line 6 is pure trochaic.