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A star is born Senyru

A new star was born
Traveled through the birth canal
Nova Skye arrived

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Congrats my sixth grandchild is born 8 lbs 13 ounces Shortly after nine am
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Barbara very nice Senryu...the line "travelled through the birth canal" captured my attention...

suggestion: would "arrived" be a good replacement to "is here"

Congratulation to the grandma and parents of the newborn

Wishing Nova Skye the very best in life..
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raj (sublime_ocean)

She a blessing and arrived does sound better

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