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Stand By Idle

Submitted by Simon Smythe on Fri, 2014-11-14 05:55

the shadow caste
is thin but long
in ancient rite's
masonic song

the idol wards off
Ra's good light
in confirmation
of the night

villagers
in sun below
bail the harvest
export to go

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft

Comments

Lenny of Cohen

Fri, 2014-11-14 21:12

this very much! Felt as though I was there watching!

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"Death" is nonsense: what is there to die?
"Life"? How could " life" "die"? That is a contradiction
in terms. Can "light" become "darkness"?
"Light" can only cease to be apparent

Wei Wu Wei

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