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stacking courage for the blind

When will i stack the courage to say it to come out
i dont know how long it will be or what ill even say
they are so caught up in their own shit they don’t see me
blankly starring at the girls or me saying that she is beautiful
when i want more than that

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i am out now and i went through my old poems and found this it makes me feel accomplished
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Outside? Out of money? Out of bounds? Out of gas?

I like the piece, short and direct.

I have to admit I really don’t understand your last comment

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i know their are a lot of homophobes on this platform
i hope your not one of them
coming out is telling close friends your LQBTQ+

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that I have seen any evidence of homophobic writing here at Neo. We do not discriminate in matters of sexuality. I do think that most of us are of the opinion, that one is free to choose as they please. My own feelings are, that if there is a God, and he is supposed to be perfect, then he did not make a mistake, when he made you. I do not think that it is a deliberate choice of who you are attracted to, but something that you are born with. I have no problem with your choices. Be who you are here and if you ever experience any discomfort because of a comment made to you or about you, report it to the AC or someone like me, who will help you. Interesting title. I don't believe I have ever heard that particular expression before "Stacking courage".
It makes sense in a way; as one might pile up enough courage to finally get it said. Your pace was short and sweet as one might expect, almost a blurting out, if you will. The theme is something that should not be swept under the rug or hidden; if you feel it say it! [ If you don't mind my asking, how did your 'coming out' go? Were there any surprises?] ~ Geezer.
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i haven't experienced homophobia here however i have sexism
witch means a lot of people still have an old fashioned way of thinking.
i agree my theme was kind of hidden but i like it that way so you
can interpret how you have felt similar to my story.
my whole family already knew so it was no surprise however
my sister said i wasn't she has now come to her senses about it.
- thank you for the feedback i love this kind of critique.

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entirely welcome. I meant what I said; if you ever feel that you are the target of sexism or any kind of "ism" , let someone know and it will be dealt with in accordance with the rules and guidelines of the site. Glad things seem to be working out for you! ~ Geez.
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Comments and critique are vital to this site!
Even if you just say: I liked this story or your spelling
of a word is wrong, take the time to write a line or two
and comment. Your fellow poets will thank you!
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Thanks for clarifying.

My granddaughter has recently explored her orientation as well. Doesen’t mean I don’t love her still. In her case, the exploration seems like a genuine inquiry.

Looking forward to reading more of your work.

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