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The spy

I grasp my cow, it's tiny scowl
so when we think, despite the sink
you grow your toes, in desperate throes
and pretend they're not so fowl.

If when we turn, without a burn
and tackle every scullery
we can skip on vile skullduggery
and see a daisy crimelord spurn

I grab your foot, with a smelly curse
and try to make it relevant
so give up verse, and then traverse
Some broken glass, and raise an undead revenant.

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I grabbed at my feet,
Thought holy cow
Why do you scowl
Was I indiscreet

In desperation now
My toes I always know
Sometime so sweet
Other times so foul

When foul desperate I be
Scullery skulduggery
In the sink to clean
Sweet daises they glean

Step aside with your meat
I ain't going to grab your feet
Relevant verse transverses
Now I wait for Neo curses..

Not sure where this write of yours came from, or is going but it is fun to play with..
My Hobbits feet is square and hairy I is no Fairy.
Loves you Bru,
Yours Ian..

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the code is broken
tell no-one
lest trousered anemones become rampant!

cheers,
Jess
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Fun in poetry, is liken to a beaut day,
or an overture that caresses the mind,
Yours Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Strictly platonic of course!
[takes a quick cold shower]

My brother we have weathered much stormy weather. All those who remain my friends deserve medals.

cheers,
Jess
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i like it

always remember to make a critique of other poems
using the hoe is not madness for nothing

Also limericks, whilst often nonsense, usually comic and sometimes smutty are a fine exercise in developing rhyme and meter techniques.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet is a workshop. Poets take the time to read and think about your work and offer suggestions.
There is no obligation to make any changes however please acknowledge critique and comments.

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