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The colored leaves
Hide my eyes

The spider web
Retrieves my rhymes

Wrapped in silken
Bed she lies

Her pillowed head
Spun sunset die

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the line
Retrieves my rhymes
could be re-worked, IMO,
Bespeaks my rhymes,
just a suggestion.

Not sure about the last line either
Spun sunset die[s]

I like it, but it could use some work.
Or I am stupid.

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