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spermyovee

Submitted by loved on Sun, 2012-05-20 23:08

the war would be not worth it at all
if an ovum were to be displayed
as you say,
millions of sperms in array
all will go astray...
oh what a waste
a million times won’t help
an isolated sperm ,
the invisible one,
to in one ultimately dwell

so why the hell
display an ovum isolated
take the 1000 out
and in a row lay
then many varieties of sperms may,
fight to live another day...

well started is half begun
lady I suggest with your ova run,
guys have been let loose
any one will cum
to now shoot...

A great opportunity comes my way
to my hidden sexy talent display...

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Bryan

Sun, 2012-05-20 23:58

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Please understand my comment comes from one with a science background. The general public likely does not know or care. Like deer the plural of sperm is sperm. There are a few who treat it like fish (plural fish but some use fishes) but general acceptance is sperm.

You've presented fertilization in a literary light.

loved

Mon, 2012-05-21 09:09

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this poem is a consequence to some gals poem
defining/desiring teen age angst,
why her ovum can't be displayed ,
in a crystal glass vases for others to appreciate,
hence the conjoint title
sperm ,fish, deer ,notwithstanding
the leader sperm ought to stand out
What do you say .
Nice poem anyway

loved

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loved

Thu, 2012-05-24 13:28

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Glad no one missed me in the passed 48 hours of absence
and none read my nonsense
but in the meanwhile
ova became ovum..

loved

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