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Spend Well

To spend

in love's language

is to spend ''it'' wisely

for lovely kids

the night watches silently

you are breathless

so is she

spend the night

not with me

but her beholding

spend well
your hidden energy

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Any particular reason you capitalizes line 4?. Also you might consider changing "lovers'" to love's......don't know why, just seems better lol...........stan

at times it looks nice
to know
has been read
by poetry papa's
lol ha ha

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Well one of your better presentations, not sure if the word Progeny is suitable for a night of well spending..
The word could be used as an outcome of such actions , But loved the piece anyway, Yours Ian ..

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

telling your progeny to go with his beloved and make whoopee, rather than spend the night with you.
Why would he not do so. He could have dinner with you, and her for a long desert afterwards, no?
I don't see the conflict, but I like your libertine attitude.

I'd rather learn from one bird how to sing
than teach ten thousand stars how not to dance
ee cummings

Eumol as and when you visit me

but while u were reading
I was directed to abandon
which I did as asked by IAN

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