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SPECULATION

Submitted by Geremia on Sat, 2016-04-02 14:53

SPECULATION
I never felt so sad
and my heart never touched
the essence of my being
from the deep, very deep recesses
of the mind, dark whispers of desolation
and primeval fears surge like demons
shrilling unholy litanies.
the devil is on the move, lurking
in the shadows in hopes that I fall
this God may annihilate me for my
human ways and my redemption
will be in the days of suffering to come.

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Geezer

Sat, 2016-04-02 15:38

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tapped in to the basest, darkest fears of religion! That we will not measure up to the potential of our god's will for us and we will be abandoned to the misery of rejection and punishment! I much prefer the image of a god that recognizes that we are [only human] and therefore to be treated as though we are children and not to be beaten and whipped eternally, but given the opportunity to change as we learn. ~ Gee.

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raj

Sun, 2016-04-03 07:18

I agree with Gee's positive comments above...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Geremia

Sun, 2016-04-03 14:37

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Thank you, Gee ans Raj. Truth is universal

joe

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Keith Logan

Sun, 2016-04-03 19:55

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You know, I can't help but suspect Satan is not a very nice being
Clever writing, I appreciated it much.

Keith Logan
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Geremia

Mon, 2016-04-04 12:27

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Thank you, my friend, Evil exists, but so does the Good. My writing often is influenced by my strong R.C. "indoctrination"

joe

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Geremia

Mon, 2016-04-04 12:27

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Thank you, my friend, Evil exists, but so does the Good. My writing often is influenced by my strong R.C. "indoctrination"

joe

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Roscoe Lane

Mon, 2016-04-04 00:15

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Religion is lost on me, but i respect your beliefs and your writing. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Geremia

Mon, 2016-04-04 12:23

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I was raised Roman Catholic -wish I hadn't been.

thanks, Roscoe

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lovedly

Mon, 2016-04-04 12:40

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of who and what and the why fore
would you like to leave
a message
of a God created
by man
as nature came first

Should there be Religion
should there be Visa
or only Americans are exceptions
if so why!

shouldn't gather together
this world's
intelligencia
and
lead human all from darkness
in to the wisdom
called light
and seep and creep out of the blindness
where mostly today man does reside
many here since ages in caves beside

be free like me
an eagle that I be
at every airport is my home
I guarantee
just tell me and I'll meet ye

now abide with me!

Geremia

Mon, 2016-04-04 12:42

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I know for certain that I know nothing,

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lovedly

Mon, 2016-04-04 12:53

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your darkest poetry since ages
has made me believe
that there lies some salvation and reprieve

we must and ought to believe
we need from the densest forests of darkness
an enlightened relief
twill only come from world wide intellectual poets
like Joe thee
believe me!

Keith Logan

Mon, 2016-04-04 13:16

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This is a well crafted statement of your beliefs.
Fortunately for me, my God takes no pleasure in the pain of others.

Keith Logan
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