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SPACES

Submitted by Geremia on Thu, 2016-04-14 12:05

ABOUT SPACES
I’ve left a space
for others to fill
my time is done
in this godforsaken place.
I am turning to stone
but my heart is strong
and I linger forever alone.
I know what death is,
I’ve seen it before
What door did I open
to bring me here so soon
but then why do wolves
bay at the moon…

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lovedly

Thu, 2016-04-14 13:44

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did you type it or Richards

When my voice is silenced
let me see
how many would
come to know
or
want to know
why I am silent so

Do dwell on my question
and
let me know
as a say happy
if only have a go
whether you were happy
to know
all about my silence
if so

then let me go
enjoy your daily show
now
let only my silence flow..
okay glow...
you all me, know.

Geremia

Fri, 2016-04-15 09:09

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Richard. silence is crfeation in progress .I wopuld ne concernmed for you and so would all of NEO

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lovedly

Fri, 2016-04-15 11:59

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not clear joe

Geremia

Fri, 2016-04-15 12:39

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You have become a mainstay on NEO. You would be missed, and NEO would never rbe same. Keep flying on poet's wings, my dear friend..

joe

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lovedly

Fri, 2016-04-15 19:34

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you take me to those heights
where I could never dream to ever fly

but for you Joe
you have been my master
all know
and
a sincerest one at that also

many read me
only coz you say so

hope you stay longer
ere you go

May the winds of change
bring about a change
and
let you for ever in our hearts remain

this world is a vast domain
we all know
no one for all times does remain
but we have to be sane
and
accept of what does remain

raj

Thu, 2016-04-14 14:39

Good to see you posting again. Internal flow of emotion vividly expressed ...

Take good care...

Warm regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Geremia

Fri, 2016-04-15 09:07

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thank you, Raj :)

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Sparrow

Fri, 2016-04-15 18:56

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No matter who or how your writing arrives with us, this was a great piece.
Your space will never be filled by anyone, there in the silence of the universe a change came over another one of ours, now we can rest and enjoy eternal love..
A continuation of everything..
Yours Ian..

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