Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.
SPACE GATE
Powered by the blackened sun
the UFO race long since began,
Secret base given numbers
accusations of unwarranted influnence.
A dark cloak of misspent power
exists, persists, evolves and resists,
This flight of fancy ignites my morbid
curiosity at terminal velocity.
A national security agency dwelling high
above the powers that be, first contact
not know plausible deniability extended
when the truth not know by the elected.
Where ignorence seems bliss for the masses
a world beyond closer than known,
A secret society covert operations
expanding it's fear of influence
Subversion instead of choice
silenced without a voice.
Style / type:
Free verse
(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.
Comments
lou
Wed, 2010-11-10 00:16
Zigs
I love it what more can I say ?
Lou xx
Stand tall, be proud to be who you are, give the world the finger!!!!
ziggy
Thu, 2010-11-11 17:01
hi
hi lou, thank you for your comment
what more can i say lol
I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.
author commentRace_9togo
Wed, 2010-11-10 00:22
I like this,
There is some spelling stuff to attend to, but minor.
I enjoyed the coiling paranoia twisting tight that you engender here, and the imagery is wonderful.
Respectfully, Race
"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo
http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo
ziggy
Thu, 2010-11-11 17:02
hi
hi yes needed a quick fix lol
thank you for reading /commenting on this ,,,,,,zigs
I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.
author commentziggy
Thu, 2010-11-11 17:05
hi ros
hello there how are you, "v" lord thats going back a bit lol
no i saw a UFO when i was about 12, it was in the papers
the next day , hence my poem ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.
author commentjudyanne
Wed, 2010-11-10 13:06
interesting write ziggy
i really love
'A dark cloak of mis-spent power
exists, persists, evolves and resists,'
a few typos as the others have already said
but i found this poem very intriguing
thanks
love judy
xxxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
ziggy
Thu, 2010-11-11 17:06
hi
hi judy, you just picked out my own fav lines in this
yes yhis needed a fix or two , i am glad you like it
cheers ,,,,,,,zigs
I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.
author commentHooded Stranger
Wed, 2010-11-10 13:09
Ziggy
Zigs,
we have discussed this piece outside of Neo, so you already know I like it and i am also privy to what inspired it.
In short, you nailed exactly what you were trying to achieve and express with this write.
I know that Richard (Moonman) has a passion for the outer space so I hope he sees this one as I know he will enjoy it.
Good write, and well delivered...and I just love your subtle rhyming technique, expertly illustrated in this write.
regards,
HS
ps. 5 stars of course, nomination...I'll think about it!...Lol!
--------------
Workshops are now open:
http://new.neopoet.com/workshop/find
--------------
With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth, yet nobody sees me.
ziggy
Thu, 2010-11-11 17:08
hi
hey hood, yes you got a peek at this before neo lol
I am delighted you think i got it right , yes maybe
mr moonman might get a peek cheers hood ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.
author commentloved
Wed, 2010-11-10 13:32
really nice
ZIGGY NICE REALLY!
loved
ziggy
Thu, 2010-11-11 17:09
hi
well hello there how have you been
ok i hope, i am glad you think its nice lol
cheers ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.
author commentCandlewitch
Sat, 2010-11-13 11:49
Dearest Ziggy
I cannot tell you which lines I like best for they are all superior! You appeal to my imagination with your thoughts. It is so good to be back and able to read your work once again, my dear friend.
love, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.