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SOS me .....recompose this one for me

My Sinography
touching the rock bottom of the sea let me now see how the bottom kicks me,my
sine curve does die but the control within me does lie,(as in lay) I stradle at the bottom till comes along a submarine and the waves it generates kicks me up to rise and fly above the ocean levels as does a dolphin and from Lovedly I may become like a flying one a dolphin or seal who can I be just tell me... I am in the anchor of life help me rise comment a while and enthuse energy which now I purportedly I'm lacking ..my dullness may be attributed to old age help me get out of this iron like rusty cage and then once I am above the surf see how my poetry does greenify like the turf ..golfers wish to crumple
creativity is not that simple

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

I agree, to create something worth reading by others is our common dream and for some people I believe is very much achievable.
Where to find the strength and inspiration?
I think first step is stop looking for them and be in Zen tradition content with a sweet silence, breathe in first and then the poetry will come on your breath out.
But first one has to breathe in.

IRiz

I took a long breath and coughed this
in earnest reality
in moments only
I don't expect anyone to redraft it
after some more have read(if at all)
I will
Thanks ma'am

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