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Sonnet to Parting

Your beauty did not wane with fleeting cheer;
What bold adventure would I not accept
On your behalf, but for this truth: it’s clear,
Your love broods in bewilderment, and kept
From mine—all for the sake of being true.
So I concede; I know you cannot break
A solemn pledge that’s still upheld by you,
Not likely to be shattered for my sake;
But since I must depart, one final thought;
I pray you won’t forget these words I say,
With which I end a love that’s been for naught?
Then know: If you should think of me some day
**** And feel a soft touch on your pensive face—
**** A memory has kissed you in my place.

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Structured: Western
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How was my language use?
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No meaning should be adhered to the context. My love life is well.
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have used the word [affixed] rather than adhered. Otherwise a nicely done sonnet. I think that sonnets are inherently made for romance and heartache. No meaning affixed to this particular one. ! Geez.
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Romance and heartache? if only I knew about those two. As is, I can only use my imagination as I pee and moan. However, i love writing these little songs that tell so much. Thanks you for commenting, Sir. Jerry

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Mmm this is a sonnet and so beautifully done, as much as it pains me to say. lol I don't have the green eyed monster. Better to have loved and lost than never to have loved, this is another sublime sonnet that I already read the other day. Your last line is wonderful.

Thank you...Teddy

who else could utter such sweet words of appreciation than my Teddy lady? Please, do not be surprised if you find a sonnet that I will dedicate to you. I'm proud to have you as a reader of my verses, and short of sending you a million dollars--I just don't know how to remunerate you for your kindness. Thank you, dear Teddy.
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how sorrowful is the poem forgive the late entrance beautiful yet tragic

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so delighted that you had a chance to read my sonnet that's based on a true episode--nothing to do with me, but someone who told me of his illicit liaison with a married woman. It was a near-tragedy--enough said, lol. Thank you, dear Lynn.
Jerry

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Hello, JerryK! So good to see your sonnet! This one actually is so tender and heart-breaking. "So I concede..." That line made me pause. Very lovely, and I think all of us can relate to the touch of a memory kissing us. Cupid must come to you for advise.
Thank you!
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thank you for the visit and your much appreciated comment. It's always a pleasure to read your words of assessment of my verses. Thank you, kind lady. Oh, yes; I'll be glad to advise Cupid in matters love and heartbreak --like the little twerp will listen to this broken-down sonneteer, lol. Thank you, dear Lavender.
Jerry

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This is, yet again, a beautiful and masterfully executed sonnet. Especially the last two lines which, with your permission, I would like to quote in a collection I am publishing on the internet? So expressive and sweet. I love it.
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"To reveal art and conceal the artist is art's true aim." Oscar Wilde

Of course you may help yourself to those lines you had mentioned; I don't even know if they are my originals. Nothing under this sun of ours really is. I'm just delighted that you speak so highly of my work. Thank you, dear poet. I appreciate your kind--even sweet words. Thanks, and have a good night. Jerry

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