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SONG FOR SARAH

In the still, quiet moments I see her then.
She is there sitting, looking out
the glass room windows at
our life out there.

Where are you now, my dear?
You only come to me
in shimmers during daylight,
in dreams as a truth.

I see you then, how could I not?
Feel you when I reach out
to the shimmering of the light.
Feel you when I reach out with my hand.

In my meditations, you have been
there with me
We talk, and you insist that I be calm
reassure that things will be alright.

We were not just a pleasant fiction.
The Us was ever felt
never failing, even when at odds,
changing only when it was your time to leave.

You were too weak then
to discern those who were your detriment.
There was our love, that you knew would
always be present. Our Love.

My wedding ring will not come off.
It is as much a part of me as the air I breathe,
as my red blood coursing all thru.
I see you shimmering in the daylight.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

I can see that this would be a sensitive subject for you. and this woman, your wife, was and is a major part of your life. the tenderness comes through with great clarity and focus. I like your title, and it fits the piece. there is a constancy throughout. I am so sorry for your loss.

*hugs, Cat

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I was about to turn the light out, when I needed to write this. Had attempted to write it x4before, and go no further that the title plus two half-assessed lines.

This all came out in a rush, no research for “just the right word” or moving phrases, or letter analysis or line counts.

Thank you for reading, and taking the time to comment.

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yours to refine over time. You have some very good lines and I know that as you look back on it, you will decide better than any of us how to readjust it. There are no words or anything that is wrong, just things that you will feel are better. ~ Gee.
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