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Sonata

When doubts appear to tear us both apart
And throw their cruel objections at us two--
When tears flow from our eyes and drown the heart,
Then I must speak of my deep love for you.
Do come with me, and share my fondest dream;
Find refuge in our placid, dreamy land
Where time stands still, until new daylight’s gleam
Will touch us with assuring, warming hand
To stir us gently from a troubling spell.
Come, dream with me; let hope and kindness flow.
Then, each resounding word and sigh shall tell
What only lovers in their wishful dreams may know.

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This flowed very well and brought the emotion that follows an argument or misunderstanding between two that have many years invested in the relationship. The dream of lovers in the dreamland of romanticism. How sweet the words to reconciliation. Nice work. ~ Geez.
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I'm so glad you understood the meaning of my--Sonata--a term that should, by all rights, be reserved for a musical piece--which I will endeavor to play on my violin, momentarily. I might have named my Sonata a "Polka in D-major," but that has too many words-- Well, my friend, I'm off to the loony bin where I pick up my best poetic thoughts. Kidding, good friend. I'm glad you like my poem. Thank you. Jerry

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Absolutely beautiful... applause ! Bravo

Kindest Regard Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

thank you for those sweet words of applause; so much appreciated, m'dear.
Jerry

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your poem is soft and gentle the words that stick in my mind "come dream with me" how beautiful those words are

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I want to thank you for your more than kind words, but let my most sincere words of thanks suffice; you are very sweet. Much appreciated, Jerry

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Sonata, you have definately serenaded me with this one, as ever you pull the ladies with your romantic poetic heart. What would love be without doubt and thoughtful reasoning?

Thank you...Teddy

I'm glad to read that my sonata (serenade) touched your heart. Indeed, all you ladies deserve to be serenaded. What would become of us crude menfolks if it wasn't for your gentle influence on us? Thank heaven for little...and grown-up girls.
Thank you for your charming comment, dear Teddy. Jerry

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