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Some Harsh Truths

So many times we have seen deaths occurred
and yet, we still took this short life for granted

We wish to have a long life
but our actions turn it into a lie

We often regret our own actions too late,
after our loved ones are already dead

We judged others because of their flaws
as we remain ignorant of our own scores

When we point at another person in condemnation
three of our own fingers are pointing back at us

We say we wanted to save the world for our future.
but we are its worst enemy like no other

We claimed we hate all types of violence
but enjoy those shown on television

Maybe it is time to change our ways
to embrace life with more grace..

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It is natural thing that humans thrash around in life, they seem to wish ill on themselves seeming unable to change things maybe this is a place just for us to learn many lessons that we can only do in a physical body, take care,
Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

You have indeed listed some of the bitter facts of life. Yet, the fact remains that, these are some of the things which separate average human beings from saints...


raj (sublime_ocean)

I'm just stating the facts to remind myself of the common flaws in hope that I could do my best not to repeat them.


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