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Soliloquy of Love.

If Faustus would give all souls for Mephistopheles,
i would give all the World for her love,
I will even shatter the laws of physics,
if she be Linette I'll turn myself to dove,
like Jason i will venture for the golden Fleece,
like Kratos i will overthrow Jove,
like Sin bad i will sail the deadly seas,
all these and more will i do for her love,
if she's the devil then I'll gladly sell my soul,
i will fight epic battles greater than the trojan war,
i want her so badly not friendship i want more,
for my love for her is like a black hole,
so i scream my love till my throat gets sore,
i am ready for a priest my intentions are pure.

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Structured: Eastern
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This is my first sonnet and one of my 1st poems ever, I wrote it 7 years ago, I was still learning about rhymes and how to write so be nice while criticizing.
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