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in the solace of prayer

a symphony of prayer
touches my mind
and in the peace
of whispered words
I soothe my heart

some are imprinted
without thought
and as filigreed light
warms my soul,
they slip out
as an adoration
sung from the heart

in these moments
of reverence and love
where no pain can burn
or malice survive

I come as close to heaven
as I can bear to be

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is one that not many know how to approach, but you got it right, prayer does somehow make things better.
I thought that the flow wasn't as smooth as it could be. Just a couple of suggestions?
1)some are [formed] without thought
2)I think you could leave off the the part that goes: "sung from the heart"
which would also take out the double appearance of "heart"
Love and higgest bugs, ~ Gee

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I dont plan to edit this one for a week or so to see what others think of it

thanks for the read and the most helpful comment its always appreciated

love and higgliest bugs JC xx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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I really like this! The theme, the manner in which you've capture it and the quietude right down to the tone!
Then there's the closing lines!
Excellent piece!
Regards

Bonitaj

Its lovely to see you here its been a long time, way to long, I am chuffed you like this one I will take a look in a little while to see if you have posted anything

love and hugs JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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This is quite simply a meditation of a very high order. My congratulations. With your permission, I will use this in my own prayer life.

As to structure and other incidentals, I see no issues here. Simple clear minimalist....
Again well done, JC.
Joe

My mind's writing cheques my body can't cash.

You are most welcome to use it, I would be honoured :)

I am very very happy you liked it

hugs JC x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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A lovely song from the heart wishing to become closer to that inner self, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thanks for the read and the lovely words I am very happy you liked it

love always JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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