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So Immense

We connect the dots
When we’re deep in thought
A million synapses in the brain

We take the time
To make the perfect rhyme
Like the meadow needs the rain

Cause life don’t always
Make much sense
But when it does
It’s so immense

It’s the engine
The steam engine
To our train

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are always or almost always, great. Language is good too, not overly simple but, plain words to understand. The rhyme was great and the theme was brought nicely to and from the beginning to end. Nice little ditty to add to the day. ~ Geezer.

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thanks Geezer

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thanks Legna

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