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SMOKY MOUNTAIN LESSON

These mountain ridges I once knew,
steep, stoney and tinted blue,
escarpments I traveled in days of youth.
What did I seek then? Maybe truth.

I watched their woods each year ablaze
in cool dampness of autumn's haze
for well nigh three score years
some marked with joy a few by tears.

But now old aches ban me from them,
no more to find some hidden fen.
Now all their beauty I can see
is from roadsides, sometimes T.V.

And that truth in youth I sought,
the answer which can't be sold or bought?
Has been revealed at last to me...
Life lasts not near eternity.

Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

Nice crisp and easy on tongue crafted with your skill of creating imagery,,,thanks for sharing an example of western structured poetry which could inspire to participate in your contest...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

Glad you enjoyed this one. BTW the contests aren't "My" contests. They are created and judged by a different invited neopoet member each month. My and Geezer's only contribution is in recruiting the judges and offering them guidance if they ask for it.

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most enjoyable poem
i love the structure very much
i think this form is the best for the content of your poem

IRiz

I realized it had been a long time since I'd used a classic AABB rhyme pattern (I'd been using ABAB mostly) so I figured I'd see if I could still use this pattern without the rhyme seeming forced. Thanks for dropping by........stan

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You haven't lost the touch of the AABB rhyme scheme. I'm impressed! ~ Gee.
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Good to know this old time pattern is still working for me. I appreciate your dropping by.......stan

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