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The Smitten Editor

Submitted by brittle light on Sun, 2015-01-11 03:20

my adjectives caressed her nouns
my adverbs followed her actions closely
and with a keen sense of direction,
my prepositions tracked and guided
her every placement and position
but, by her lackadaisical use of punctuation
I misread her meaning completely
now I am just another unreferenced pronoun
replaced by him , a dangling clause

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft

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judyanne

Sun, 2015-01-11 05:17

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I really like the way your mind works
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

emogothgirl

Sun, 2015-01-11 18:35

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there are many things I would say about this including "why did I not come up with this," "oh you clever dog you," and other things, but I will stick with I absolutely love this poem. it made my day, wonderful job my friend.

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Arrow

Sat, 2015-01-17 20:20

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And if it rhymed . . . ooohh, I can't stand the thought!

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