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A Smack In Time Tingles Fine

Smacking was a subject close to his heart
Then Yenti, came in to let the fun start
Little Serendipity as a child had suffered so
But grew up and just wouldn't let it go

I was told by friends that knew these folks
It would just go beyond the odd friendly poke
It disturbed our Yenti that as he was old
It was construed as being lewd and much too bold

Come on now give us older folks a break,
Our memories are good, though our hands still do shake
Do you know that our long term ones are the thing
With the shaking we are good at many things

For beating eggs and stirring thick gravy
But there are other things but on site it's a maybe
I shall have to close, I ripped my tissue while wiping my nose
Can't type with sticky fingers that shake you know.

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Your amazing its two am I just roared laughing !!! Big smile...what a wonderful poem...

Thanks so much for that I'm grinning from ear to ear

Love always Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

It lifted you to a laughter so it was good, this is a shady subject so I thought I would only write about the bones of it LOL.
You have a great evening and look after you,
Yours Ian .T x

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I certainly laughed thanks for that I had to come back for second helping :)

much love always Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

you're not that old why worry about frailty , it comes to us all

Just a fun piece I put it together for fun when some poets were talking of spanking and other things,
Thanks for your visit, not really how I feel all the time,Yours Ian/T

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Good that you finally...came...to compose this one.................stan

As I said just a fun write when Jess and Jayne were talking about spanking, I just had to write a skit on the subject,
Thanks for dropping in, Yours Ian.T

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though our hands do.........* shake

loved

Just for you I put in a still.
Now it may read good for you
Have fun young one the days are passing by
One day you will shake as I.
Take care young Bard
Yours Ian.T Still shakin I be

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Whenever you refer the an elf, it means me, but I am not a great elf, I am a seriously flawed elf, with some good good qualities.Nonetheless I enjoyed the poem and thank you.The first stanza seemed to me to be a way of pulling me down from my cruelty and arrogance into my kindness and caringness. Thanks again.

The rest was interesting about how you relate to Aussies like me and Jayne Chloe, we do have a different perpspective on the world.

cheers,
Jess
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I have sent the Elf away, it was written when you and Jayne were talking about smacking in a comment the other day.
Thanks for popping in it is good for my mind.
Yours as always, Ian.T

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