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Slumming

neon webs
bounce, the boom
a blended haze

saturday slinkers
crowding
burst of youthful lust

horns and hubbub
the splash and spill

drums pounding
deep into the wilds

the joint's gone high-octane

swelling
hot

joy's ragged edge
feral
uninhibited

exhilerating

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This is a tonic for a winters day! All the joy, sights, sounds and colours roll together in a joyful carnival party.

Love the language and imagery.

Thanks for sharing!

Love Mand xxxx

thank you so much for your thoughts

I do appreciate them....even though this reply is so late....my bad! (manners)

Al

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Loved the write, but do I detect a little laze there when using "feral" as a single line.
There are quite a few poets using this word, leaving it up to the reader to make their own picture of a very wide scope.
Am I being picky here when I would rather have three words than one to describe something ?????
If I am just ignore me, lol Yours Ian

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I shan't ever intentionally ignor you....Just simply disagree sometimes

thanks for at least making me re-think my position, and choices.

sorry for the late responce

Al

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There is so much to like about this poem, I loved it and I adored the ending it felt exhilarating ;)

nothing to crit, except I disagree with Ian's comment on feral (sorry Ian lol) I like it on its own, giving all the imagery that goes with it and for me it sets up the ending perfectly

I have to give you kudos I loved it

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Damn xx

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Sorry lol xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

thanks...my hero (heroine) coming to my rescue from mean ol' Ian...His reputation is now suspect!!!

glad you enjoyed the piece

Al

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My cave is dark and deep
I retreated for a sleep
A rest from all my friends
Who have taunted me no end.

My snores never reach the doors
As there ain't any on a cave
I love all my friends they keep me alive.
So you're lucky Digit is here with me
I will let him free after xmas you see

So you'd better stay my friends
or come to nasty ends lol
He can be a lovely fellow.
Of late he's been quite mellow
Though I think he's a funny guy and quite
Feral
La la..
Have a lovely Christmas and my love to all those around you,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

and Merry Christmas to you and all Merry ol' England!

Al

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Liked this a lot!

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"Death" is nonsense: what is there to die?
"Life"? How could " life" "die"? That is a contradiction
in terms. Can "light" become "darkness"?
"Light" can only cease to be apparent

Wei Wu Wei

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