I feel the same often
this is one of those that either clicks, or misfires, of blows someone's mind apart
I don't care which
It's just a poem. some days chicken, some days feathers

if too obvious, it's not considered worthy,
too dense and it's like swimming in pea soup.

hopefully someone gets a chuckle about something , even if unintentional

I'll use your suggestion about single wording when I get around to an edit

thanks Mark