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sleep has an element of t

Submitted by loved on Mon, 2012-07-23 10:29

Even sleep has an element of time,
for you just awake after a
slumber
and
then you enter a no time zone
if you don't awake

Till then sleep and awake
as usual,
till slumber does over take,
then you enter the timelessness zone
and
about that there is no mistake.

Till then sleep
and
if you desire awake
then when Sadie is ready
she will come
and
you she’ll take.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Mon, 2012-07-23 18:10

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Only if you ask by name will that young lady be at your side, she looks after children on their journey's and as you know there are too many children needing help.
There are others and probably many in your group that will look after you travel plans, even Einstein believed that there was a probability that all things you call time were now.
Yet you sleep and you dream this is a quality we have to make excuses for, Yours Ian.T

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Mon, 2012-07-23 20:53

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indefinite....
till both parallels finally meet at infinity perhaps
as even light bends

loved

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Ian.T

Tue, 2012-07-24 09:30

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As we know light is effected by Gravity meaning it has mass , this being the reason why we see stars in a place that is false as the light from them has travelled past another star.
So knowing this if light from one star goes past another star and the light is bent, on one side to the left, and the other to the right, they will meet some place in space having started out as parallel lines LOL
Take care young Traveller the journey is only just begun, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Tue, 2012-07-24 10:58

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needs a renovation
any takers
do queue

loved

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Ian.T

Tue, 2012-07-24 15:03

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While you are waiting you could read some of my pieces lol,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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