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Sit-at-home

Empty streets, distraught zone
It's quiet and empty in all places
In fear and tears we walk alone
Forlorn looks on saddened faces

One man jailed for a whole nation
In solidarity we take our chains
And where he goes we march on
In his loss we find our gains

What's become of the blood-letting
Even the loudest of voices are silent
They loot, they destroy in profit getting
Dead bodies litter wherever they went

Seems like the devil has made east his encampment
Corpses and blood eaten and drank in sacrament
I like the solidarity in our cause
We must fix our broken laws

This rollercoaster is a déjà vu
Now we sit at home me and you
How long it'll last we don't know
A fearsome monster it will grow

After full circle it will turn around
When it has reached it's full course
In all our land peace will abound
If in one accord fairness we endorse

Last few words: 
Eastern part of Nigeria has been in turmoil lately of some sort of discrimination and marginalization from a section of the country over them. Evey monday has been a sort solidarity demonstration, by way of sit-at-home protest,to get the authorities hear their voice and meet their demand for fairness, equity and justice. This poem depicts all that.
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Comments

thank you for explaining the Sit-At-home part of your poem and title. I really liked these Lines:

After full circle it will turn around
When it has reached it's full course
In all our land peace will abound
If in one accord fairness we endorse

I like it because it ends with hope...

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Yes Cat, I'm very hopeful that things will get better.
Thank you for your time.

author comment

I do believe that this is the best I've seen from you!
Your pattern, rhythm and rhyme are especially good!
Just one little bobble here and it is in the third
and last lines of the fourth stanza.
I do believe that you can make a better rhyme here.
How about:

"I like the solidarity in our cause
We must fix our broken laws"

Of course, if that is contrary to what you wish to say
I understand that you may want to use some other means
of saying what you really want to say.

All-in-all, a great poem that many should say is top-notch
for it's ideas and well thought out writing. Good job! ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

You know what, I had you in mind and deliberately did a rhyme scheme poem this time. I guess it turned out beautifully.

Thank you for the critique and have effected the correction. Looks good!

author comment

You have intelligently weaved a beautiful poetry! I sighted your title: sit at home! I knew this voice was coming from a soul - brother!

Nnamdi Kanu's incarceration had caused an uproar and destruction of lives and properties! Dark clouds now looms every where! But we must continue fighting for our freedom and break away from this british forceful marriage called 'OneNigeria!'
The federal government must give us the referendum. That's where we all stand.
KANU is a prisoner of conscience! A freedom fighter for our generation.

Hearty congratulations for this piece!

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

My soul-brother, it pains me seeing the travails we have to pass through. So much destruction in a land of promise.

This too shall pass.

Thank you for stopping by.

Regards.

author comment

You are welcome brother!

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

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