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the sin in suffering

If I could take away the pain
and make a story change track,
If it could stem the flow of tide
to chase the darkness to black

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To see the devastating agony
that tears apart your soul,
here, I'll keen beside your body
wishing It could make you whole

Nobody deserves these losses
that heaped upon your door,
I know if I looked sometimes,
I'd discover you curling the floor

My dearest sweetest friend
I can feel your pain from here,
know if I had white wings
you'd always have me near

My heart is filling with tears
the ones you've shed today,
I'll hold them close forever
until my last dying day

Your love, it held them dear
it shone with exhaustion's eyes,
you've done an impossible feat
its written there in the sky

Their love will keep you strong
when the pain, eats at your core,
and just when you think it's better
grief will overcome you once more

And when the darkest days
start to hit you with a thud,
don't worry my dear friend
I'll be there, we're best buds

So now, silence will be in our ways
until life's hands draw you back in,
Yes, I'll sit with you and suffer
even when the ice turns thin.

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And if the Gods made me choose
I'd say, Grief is the hardest pain,
please have a comforting shoulder
as nothing will ever seem the same. 

 

Review Request (Intensity): 
Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Last few words: 
My best friend lost her husband before Christmas and the day before yesterday she lost her Mum, the suffering is nearly unbearable.
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Send my condolence to her. It is hard when you lose your loved ones.

This piece is laden with emotion and full of sincerity. Thanks for sharing.

Lots of love and hugs
Alid

Right now I feel helpless she is busy with family and making plans for the funeral so I am giving her the space she needs, if she needs me she will ask me of that I know.

she's been so through so much pain just wish there was something I could do to ease that pain

love and hugs Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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It is not hard to see you know of suffering, and the things told to me in many ways show me it is true.
You are one of the few, that can hold another in your arms and keep them from the ills that seek them out.
It is so hard to know that in your suffering you give out more each day than many I know, even the Gods take note of what you do..
A lovely write and from the very heart of you, so as we strive to be perfect no matter what you think of you it is within your grasp.
One day we shall sit a while and talk of these things then all will become clear young Jaughter,
Yours as always Da, and the Children xx

here, I'll keen beside your body

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Yes Da we both know I know what its like but its ok in my mind to have this pain its something I have to bear, but I hate seeing the ones I love hurting it rips me apart and I feel helpless all over again.

and yes this was from the heart to the page no edits lol as Stan noticed giggle lol

love you always Jaughter x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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There are a few typos I'm sure you can spot. Doesn't it seem that at times bad things come in bunches. I recall a single year not too long ago losing 5 family members. My heart goes out to your friend........stan

Your so right we all go through this my bad days are 20 years behind me and in front of me I've had a lot of losses but not a husband and mother together, though I lost my nana then my mum 10mths apart that wrecked me for sometime, I cannot imagine what that's like for her we talk but only when she wants to at the moment I am giving her the space she needs and when she needs to say hi she does just not the happy bubbly gorgeous woman I know and that makes me so sad

think I've fixed the typos but if I missed any give me the heads up been very tired for days and haven't had a decent sleep for, forever It seems like lol

thanks for the comment very glad you guys got a chance to read it

love Sis x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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Hmmm......things a person can engage in which usually relax one into sleep.....whatever might that be...? Cant think of one---well, maybe One lmbao

Lmfao ... its not a great solo sport Bro ! Hahah

Biggest hugs and big ass smile !!

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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“Sometimes even to live is an act of courage.”
― Seneca

That's such a profound statement right there my Joe

beautifully sad but oh so true xxx

love your Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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and if you don't mind when the times right, I will be showing that to my friend xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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recently
I lost two life long friends
long and good association with both
and now two/three are in pipe line
when will they go
soon
only heaven knows...
but medicines change destinies
and
in God takes away our belief
we only console ourselves

may god be with her
and
the loving souls which have left
in peace may rest...
Amen!

We are already dying at birth

And your right its a cycle this thing called life

Some of us take death harder I don't know why that is but its something I will never be good at coping with, my own death no longer frightens me it did once but not anymore.

I'm ready for the next great adventure :)

Love your Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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I just came by and saw u had replied..
In neopoets there is no way
where one can ever know
some one has communicated..

None the less
Lord Buddha you know
hath said
to reduce suffering
reduce the pain.

Loss is such a one
we all have to sustain
and at times life long it remains

I know what I am saying
as I lost both my parents
within months.

It's been half a century since
but they keep coming in still
gone fifty years away
in my dreams
now perhaps awaiting me
I am happy
not now saddened
but in glee
they wait for me

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