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Silly Simon (For Geezer)

There once was a sweet cow named Bessie
who reigned as the Queen of the Farm.
When tempers flared and things got messy,
Bess made certain no one came to harm.

Simon, the cat, was a scamp
who boasted and schemed night and day.
When it came to shenanigans, he was champ,
but sweet Bessie would stand in his way.

Earl the Squirrel, Old Blue the dog,
a dozen mice and a rat,
chickens, ducks, and one huge hog
were all taunted by Simon the cat.

One day crafty Simon plotted
to torment that ol' Bessie gal.
He twisted, turned, and knotted
the hay in her cozy corral.

As Bessie untangled her fodder,
and cursed the cat with a scoff,
Simon tried to dump Bessie's water
from the depth of the cow's heavy trough.

But fate would be with dear Bess
as she continued to tidy her bale,
for Simon tried, but nevertheless
the trough broke and landed flat on his tail.

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Style / type: 
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
The drama continues...
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer started the party! What fun!
Thank you, Teddy!
L

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HA! I love this poem so much, and Simon got what he deserved, that scamp!! XD This was hilarious, and I was thoroughly entertained!! Amazing job :D

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Accepted a challenge from Geezer...a lot of mischief down on the farm! (Maybe you might join in?)
Thank you for your wonderful comments!
L

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Hey, first off, I love it!
You have captured the essence of Bessie!

Last line of the first stanza, you could shorten
Bessie to [Bess] to smooth it out just a bit.

Second line of number two stanza:
Try [two dozen mice] instead of [and a]

Last line of third stanza:
Get rid of the [were].

Last stanza: Third line. Try [made a mess]

All-in-all, a great barnyard poem! I love that Bess
protects her friends! ~ Geez.
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Glad you enjoyed! Thanks for the challenge - great fun! All good suggestions and I will think them over. This farm life is getting dangerous!
Thanks!
L

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wonderful! That's how I would describe it. Great contents and rhyming!! A++++ Jerry/van

A bit of fun, for certain! Thank you so much for your kind comments!
L

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