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Silently Into The Loving Night

Silently into the night
into the silence of the chilly fright
with softest music did they us delight
a distant note on a lively accordion
followed by a reverberation on a violin

silently into the eerie night

sounds of soft musical lovely quotes
to our ears were like soothing anecdotes
sounds of soft musical lovely notes
to our ears were like smoothing anecdotes.

silently into the night they strung
whistling by then had suddenly sprung
blowing clarinets from distant sand dunes
were like variable softly played lullaby tunes.

silently yeah yeah into the moistened night

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Free verse
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A musical feast. And lovely too.
I feel the 3 rd line is a bit tangled... maybe they did delight?
And your last lines would read better without the yeah yeah but that's just my opinion.
Lovely lovedly

Thank you...Teddy

Hello, Lovedly,
Feels somewhat like a song? Very descriptive and delightful, but with all the musical references, does not seem too silent. Perhaps softly?
Thank you!
L

when we all had only TRANSISTORS
DO you know ?
And
I heard drummers guys enjoying perhaps somewhere in Miami beach
millions of miles away

I composed my poem
became a song
Glad you liked it

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Yeah, yeah? Sounds like the British invasion, if you ask me. Nice music lovedly. ~ Geezer.
.

Come to Chat on the Darkside
every other Saturday night 8pm to ?
Bring your dark and delicious work
to show.

so i am keeping yeah yeah

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Is it a song fit poetry
music to ears
and
so all my cheers

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