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Silent Warrior.
Dry are the tears
that are never shed,
Rolling down in silence
along the golden thread.
They are the warriors
whose stories are never told,
Born amidst the torments
with nothing to hold.
Fighting constantly to hold the mask
and never to reveal,
The battle to defeat the pain
and conquer Achilles' heel.
The cries of the heart are masked
by the eyes that run dry,
Smiling through the emptiness,
letting only a bit of honesty to pass by.
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Comments
non sequitur
Tue, 2013-10-15 07:40
Hello there!
I liked this theme a lot and thought it well executed. I'm afraid there's too many cliches in the 3rd verse and that waters down the point you wish to make. Also in the last line, try to find a shorter expression for "to pass by"... Maybe 'slip through' or escape... Which is more the idea I think you're trying to convey.
Good title!
Regards
NS