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A Silent Thought

I just know I'm going to die young
I don't know why
I've always had that feeling
When my day is over, it's done

I want to do everything
Before I go
I want to be with my son
And see his children grow

It makes people feel quite faint
But, not I
I'm happy to be on this earth
Happy to leave and say goodbye

I often wonder how it would be
I hope it's soft with dignity?

I don't want my family sad
I want them to know, I'm very glad

I've had a life, that's full of love
Thanks to them

My world enough.

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Thanks to Geezer and JK, this is from the lady side? in any case a good theme.... not so easy to talk about, Let me know!
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no, you will live a happy, fulfilled life according to my crystal ball, and beyond that--your son and grandchildren will remember you as the wonderful mother and grandmother you were. My crystal ball never lies, and I see you walking through a long life as a happy lady. At least, that's what I wish for you. Teddy, yours is such a fine poem, inspired no doubt by the Apollo the god of muse himself. I love it. JerryK.

thanks so much for your kind words, I guess we all think this suff, its hard putting it on paper, so i just let my thoughts run.
i like your crystal ball.

Thank you...Teddy

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I guess. Every poet writes an epitaph sooner or later I think. I know I have composed several (not necessarily for myself).
I will write a new one and post it for you.

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Kind regards, Alan
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Awe, thank you. I was just inspired by the others, so i thought i would try it, I can't wait to read yours.XOX

Thank you...Teddy

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us know that we inspired you. Makes me feel like I've done something grand. I think that I would change the line toward the end.
The one that says; " I had a life full of love" I would let it say: I've had a life that's full of love."
Other than that, very good work. ~ Geez.
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It's better now, thanks Sir. This is a weird one for me to have written, I went with the flow.

Thank you...Teddy

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