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Silent Synergy:

Mindful empathy
Extraneous apathy
Comes telepathy

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Structured: Eastern
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Mindless empathy
Extraneous apathy
Chance telepathy

cheers,
Jess
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Got to hand this one to you - I preferred your version.

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