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Silenced

Submitted by Peggedit on Tue, 2020-05-12 10:57

He took the words
Right out of my mouth
A fistful of dominance
An unspoken clout

He shook all confidence
Down to Hades' resting place my
A brutal backlash
Inflicting vulnerability and disgrace

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Geezer

Wed, 2020-05-13 08:28

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that you meant the line to read: "Down to Hades, my resting place." Highlighting domestic-abuse is no easy matter and you have done it in just a few lines. Well done. ~ Geezer.
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c lynn brooks

Wed, 2020-05-13 14:13

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domestic abuse either verbal or physical is uncalled for at any time
you've said quite a bit in two stanzas

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