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SICUT EST

Submitted by Geremia on Thu, 2015-02-19 09:35

Sicut est [so it is]

Sometimes I think I've lived too long
to see them all gone
the ones I held to my heart.
I linger alone in this empty space
broken in body and soul.
Love feeds and grows on love.
and when there is no one left to care
the loneliness and longing will tear
your heart asunder...

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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judyanne

Thu, 2015-02-19 11:56

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Hauntingly true
A powerful write
Love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

Geremia

Thu, 2015-02-19 14:41

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Thanks, Judyanne. It is as I write it.

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Sparrow

Thu, 2015-02-19 19:29

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Don't you realise that no matter how much you feel broken or empty, there is still ability of yours to write such pieces as this to let us know how you feel.
In doing so you are once again filled with echoes of words and the ability to tap the keks to tell us so.
Joe you think, therefore YOU ARE,
My unconditional love I will send to you, accept and it may fill those empty spaces ,
Yours Ian

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

Geremia

Fri, 2015-02-20 06:10

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My ability to write is waning. But , good or bad, I need to express what I feel. Neopoet is my family/

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lovedly

Thu, 2015-02-19 23:15

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You are only

One Joe

All by now know
do the Nobelians too
A USA poet of class you are
We are not worthy
of the manure for you to partake

Love thyself more
poetry that you make
places all other poets, especially like me at stake

continue to make newer words
you sow
and poets like me also grow
hoping to be able to grab
strands of grass
from your hands

Geremia

Fri, 2015-02-20 06:12

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Your comment is a beautiful poem in itself, my dear friend.

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lovedly

Fri, 2015-02-20 12:39

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looking forward to more
like a bees comb is once stoned
what happens
you know

mand

Fri, 2015-02-20 04:22

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Brilliant Joe - love the rhyming scheme - your poems free flow with honest emotion tapped from the well of your very being, that's what makes them so powerful!

Thanks for sharing :) xxxx

Love Mand xxx

Geremia

Fri, 2015-02-20 12:03

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Thank you, Mand, I never thought much about my poetry, but I did see the beauty of true feelings./ My soul guides my fingers.

love to you, Mand

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Roscoe Lane

Fri, 2015-02-20 07:19

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And guides them very well. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

Geremia

Fri, 2015-02-20 12:02

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Thank you, Roscoe.... This meant a lot to me.

joe

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Geezer

Sat, 2015-02-21 22:13

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there will always be someone who will remember you and your work. As long as there is a Neopoet
and those who read your work, there will be a Joe! Well done sir! ~ Gee

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
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Geremia

Sun, 2015-02-22 05:45

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:) Thanks, Gee. Each of us will be remembered.

joe

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emogothgirl

Mon, 2015-02-23 17:04

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I would love to see you elaborate on this. I like the latin, a "dead" language for a dark poem. oh yes.

nice one

Mag

Geremia

Tue, 2015-02-24 06:39

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Sicut est+ It is so. It is what it is.

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