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Should have known

I was around people
But I could not see any of them,
For my mind was somewhere else,
My heart was unsteady,
And my tears wanted to flow like the nile river.

He had talked to me as if he didnt care
He had not detected the pain in my voice,
That is the man I loved,
Sadly he was a married man
And to him I was a passing thing.

Sadly I did not view him like that
For I loved him more than life itself,
I loved him so much, death could not compete
Even the Lord was jealous
However love was what I thought I had.

He did not understand and could not understand
For he loved his wife and two kids,
He cared for them more,
I was just a doll he could throw away,
Still I loved this rubbish.

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This one could be edited a little to make it flow better.
A lot of feelings in there yet they are shrouded in the arrangement of the Stanzas, I will have a read again later.
Old saying "If you love something let it go, if it doesn't come back hunt it down and kill it"
That's not serious or is it lol.
Take care, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I will look into it more, lol my old saying says 'If you love something let it go, and if it was meant to be yours it will come back....

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Love not
a married man says the scripture have wrought upon yourself this rapture ...who else can be caught in the trap ...none can say ....accept it that way ....and ....let the guy go away he ....has children with whom to play were just a few strings of a violin ....played and replayed ...then sadly strayed go your own isolated way ....let sad memories pass away is my prayer.... the Lord may wisdom spray


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