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The Shortest Day-Coldest Year

The shortest day of the year
Winter solstice cold icy air
Nibble at my skin
Dec. 21st two thousand ten

It’s cold in the south
Overseas in Europe, mammoth snowfalls
Hundreds of planes grounded
And thousands of people marooned

It’s wet in California
Heavy rains, flood lands
Take over sundry homes, folks wading waters
Cars congested, mired traffic

In the winter chaos
A lunar eclipse spectacular
Captured the minds of countless
Won’t chance again till Dec. 10th 2011

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Yes the high today up here near Clemson was about 36. In line 9 you might want to delete "the". This write pretty much sums up the good and bad of the past few weeks" weather.......................scribbler PS is that your child in picture ?

cold for sure. thanks for telling me. I didn't mean to put "the" there.
He is my two year old grand son. the one I posted on neopoet when he was one day old.
he talks in the third person, the first child in my family as I know to do so.
Him and my one year old grand daughter start talking in full sentences before they turn one. Sweetest kids loving and kind though hyper as can be and very active driving us crazy lol.

thanks for the comment that was quick

Always

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these are the winters in NY that I remember as a child, so to me it feels like this is the it was suppose to be all along,
the lunar Eclipes was fabulous my son has a monster scope hooked to hai computor. wow what a show to watch the maqjisty of the universe. I guess an education did by off. my children do not stop amazing with what their amazed with.
yes I'm glad to be here and enjoy it all!
always Eddie bud
PS how you doing Grannie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

Writing poems staying out of the cold. Like seeing the snow though.
kids are our most precious gifts. At the age of 2 and 1 these two keep amazing. We think they will make us proud one day with their advance knowledge and learning ability. enjoying them a lot

Yes education does pay off. I have one daughter that graduated USC and one daughter and a son in their freshman year in college. another son a computer and music whiz amazing us all the time with his creative ability. he never finish high school due to a learning disability, but a genius with computers, technology and music.

thanks for sharing wishing you and your family good things.

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A factual and historical account describing the winter of 2010.- capturing the moment of a lunar eclipse.

It's been an early hard winter so far.

I've enjoyed reading this little gem.

Thank you for sharing.

Love Mand xxxxxxx

Glad you like. I enjoyed writing it. Precious memories in poetry I think is priceless as pictures in print. Thanks for commenting and the wonderful praise.

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Happy to write a winter picture in poetry. Glad you find it a joyous reminder. A smile and unconditional love is sometimes what is needed to make a hard day easier to endure.

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Glad you enjoyed. the weather seems to be going mad all over. A deep freeze in the south, rain and mudslide cover homes and cars in the west. Mammoth snow fall covering cars in the east, not to mention the thousand stranded in bus station, subways, and airports until after the new year. mad crazy early winter. If I was there I would have written one about cyclones there also. Lol.

I didn't do any celebration, but was good.

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