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She's (bits of) an animal.

She is that canary bird who sings
the sweetest song that‘s to be heard,

She is in the ever maddening sound
of everything that’s earthly bound

She is the eagle see her soar
lion in the jungle - hear her roar,
all of these things she is and more
she's even the tigers -- front left paw,

She lives in so many differing things
azure blue on butterfly wings
even the monkey as he swings
she's the pleasure -she's the pain
that love brings,

when you look at her --
what do you see.

Obi.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Not wishing to enter the competition with this, I find it naive and cloyingly sweet, and quite frankly I'm not sure why I posted it. Obi.
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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that every once in a while that you just have to post something to make yourself disgusted!
Either that or you [shudder] are just an old softie at heart? The competition is over anyway, so no worries about having people ask you to post it and you can bury it quickly; as you would some dead carcass, so that it doesn't stink up your reputation.
I would leave off the last two lines. Sickly sweet, but really good! ~ Geez.
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"The competition is over',,, missed it again, story o' my life! (thank god)

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but maybe better... As I was reading this I had to check again that it came from you, Obi. Anyways I really enjoyed this one.

Ohms

I'm actually a pre pubescent school boy whose uncle obi is doing reeaally reeaally manly things so I wrote this for him.

Little jimmy.

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