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Shadow

I wish I was as skinny as my shadow
I wish I was as easy to hide
I wish that telling the truth was easy
And just as hard to tell that I lied.

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Is the internal logic consistent?
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Comments

Personifications of what you wish to be
See all of life is but a mystery filled with questions.
Scooby you opened a great door here with a marvelous poem thank you kindly,

Mario Vitale

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