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Seven Deadly Sins (Sloth)

Realizing my talents
could lead to a broken nail
If I acknowledge self-worth
I would have to do something about it
I lack the urge to do better
It's a gift I was born with
Eating the bread of idleness
keeps me from hunger
I'm nobody’s boss
I'll leave that to the unfortunate slaves
who believe in doing better
Laziness that I have accepted wilfully
will be my personal failure.

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So, my new project is the Seven Deadly Sins, I shall post each (Sin) day by day. Lust, Gluttony, Greed, Sloth, Wrath, Envy and Pride. Then i shall join them together to make a full Poem.
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Awe you always have such kind words, JK i was thinking maybe the end should be success? instead of my downfall failure what do you think? i will keep like this if it works but i actually am wondering.

Today after posting sloth, i've been rushed off my feet! LOL poetic justice?

Thank you...Teddy

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This is quite an undertaking you have gotten yourself into am looking forward to the rest and the finale

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So great to see you, I know i've got a lot of work to do this week, woops! I hope you enjoy this work. xoxoxo

Thank you...Teddy

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as m boss told me
once
I was a kid then
not that now I have become olden
U
WILL
NEVER
go far
I asked from whom
He
smiled
you look like his apparition 15
did you know him

Maybe it was your boss who suffered sloth if he or she couldn't see your potential. Nice to see you

Thank you...Teddy

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Dear Teddy, great idea, this project of yours. My only nit is that you don't emphasize being a sloth enough. You picture yourself just about normal...LOL.
Other than that, I love the idea, the spacing is perfect and so is the title.
All the best, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

Hello dear friend, yes I feel rather lazy to write more LOL thank you my dear gracy, this project is finished now, I really enjoyed it. Thanks for your wonderful review

Thank you...Teddy

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