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Seven Deadly Sins ( Gluttony)

Over-indulgence has led me away from the needy
My desire to have everything for myself
I take great satisfaction in knowing it’s all mine
Temptation is my vice and it's delicious
If I could I would devour it without shame
No thought for others
I will jump into the deepest river of chocolate
and drink it dry.

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So, my new project is the Seven Deadly Sins, I shall post each (Sin) day by day. Lust, Gluttony, Greed, Sloth, Wrath, Envy and Pride. Then i shall join them together to make a full Poem.
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lol goodness gracious, you just painted your very own picture lol

Thank you...Teddy

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that you will need to find the 'Golden Ticket' from Roald Dahl's story 'Teddy and the Chocolate Factory'. You may then disappear through a trapdoor in the floor and splash into a river of choc.

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Jokes aside I loved the original Charlie and the chocolate factory, would have loved to be In that film,
Oh dear for my sins please dont force snakes and toads down my throat!
(Cheesy grin covered in chocolate)

Thank you...Teddy

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that, I would be tempted to jump into that river of chocolate myself; and that I do believe that if we were not raised to disavow
gluttony and take responsibility for our actions, we would all enjoy the act of taking it all for ourselves. I am looking forward to the rest of your take on the Seven Deadly Sins. ~ Geez.
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I'm looking forward to my take on it too. lol I hope I can pull it off. Hey I know your a bit of a chocolate fan because we have had this conversation some time ago.
May I be punished for my sins? Oh no in reality I love salt more than suger. Thank goodness because Nutella is everywhere in my town.

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Is that a Freudian slip of the tongue? [May] I be punished for my sins? LoL
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We shall see! (Giggle)

Thank you...Teddy

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nice work keep it going that is a mess of chocolate though could get sloppy lol

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very messy!

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