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Sentimental....... Inspired by Ian

Submitted by loved on Fri, 2014-05-02 13:11

Upon the broadened wings of sentimentality
We hope to ride free,
to enter newer vistas hopefully…
where we shall confront happiness, may be.

Such a vision only those can see
who abide in their massive belief,
that life exists beyond this earthly sojourn,
into the far reaching realms yet unknown
but some still believe they exist.

Let them bask in the glory of hope
someday they may meet
it may be brief
but as we discover distant stars
such imagination is neither wild nor far
perhaps I may be the misleading star
Albeit
I hope not!

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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raj

Fri, 2014-05-02 15:41

I liked this one, runs smoothly on tongue and the message is very clear and forthright...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

loved

Fri, 2014-05-02 21:42

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to say such words of appreciation
it swells my heart
thanks raj

loved

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emeka ozurumba

Sat, 2014-05-03 10:07

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i always enjoy your poems as honey to bud

loved

Sat, 2014-05-03 13:29

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from worse to betterment
thanks

loved

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alidzain

Sun, 2014-05-18 14:59

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everything about it is wonderful.

Alid

loved

Mon, 2014-05-19 00:01

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just grateful

loved

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Ian.T

Sun, 2014-05-18 19:25

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At last words inspired by me, so you say, yet not perfect, lol
Glad to see others liked your write, take care young Bard,
Yours Ian .T
PS:- Sentimentality originally indicated the reliance on feelings as a guide to truth.
But current usage defines it as an appeal to shallow, uncomplicated emotions at the expense of reason.
May be the later is the words meaning that Jess was on about the other day, take care..

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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