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Senryu

Submitted by Teddy15 on Thu, 2020-10-15 09:46

opening the door
leads me to treasures unseen
hopes and dreams alive.

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Last few words:

Syllables 5 7 5 emotion

Editing stage:

Editing - rough draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

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jerryk

Thu, 2020-10-15 12:45

Hi Teddy

one never knows what to expect behind a closed door. Your senryu works for me. Jerry

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Teddy15

Thu, 2020-10-15 12:56

Signor JK

That was exactly the message I was hoping to give, how kind of you to look so deeply.

Thank you...Teddy

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Gracy

Thu, 2020-10-15 16:32

Dear Teddy. same here, one

Dear Teddy. same here, one never knows what's behind closed doors, but hopes and dreams remain. Unless you're a little phobic, as I am...LOL.
Enjoyed, Gracy

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

Teddy15

Thu, 2020-10-15 21:27

Dear gracy

Good point my dear friend. I am not fond of lifts so when they open I'm always relieved. (Hug)

Thank you...Teddy

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Barbara Writes

Fri, 2020-10-16 22:44

hey Teddy15

love this. senyru and haiku is my speciality on here.. you inspired me write one for tonight.. will see 60 a 12:00am so ill write a senyru on that. and a haiku behind it on that also..

*Collaborative Poetry Workshop* American Version of Japanese Poetry ~ Renga ~ Haiku, Senyru, Tanka.

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Teddy15

Sat, 2020-10-17 02:53

Dear Barbara

So good to see you, I adore senryu I'm so glad you enjoyed this, will look out for yours. X

Thank you...Teddy

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