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Senryu
Eyes of ugly green
Hateful, wicked, envious
Stealing happiness
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
Last few words:
So on a very recent chat with my poet friends gracy and Raj, and in keeping to the theme of the current workshop here's a little something posted as an experiment.
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Not Explicit Content
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Comments
raj
Mon, 2020-07-27 13:00
Hi Teddy
I liked the way you used the workshop prompt "jealously" in this Sneryu...good job for sure...you should post it in the workshop I think..
Be well..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Teddy15
Mon, 2020-07-27 13:12
Dear Raj
I shall be taking my holidays from Sunday so I didn't want to join and then disappear, however do you want to know my title that I would have put? I would have put simply
Green eyed monster!
Thank you...Teddy
raj
Tue, 2020-07-28 01:57
Dear Teddy
Would have been a good title...happy holidays..
raj (sublime_ocean)
Geezer
Mon, 2020-07-27 14:03
It works...
very well. Nice job and you can still post it in the workshop and say there, that you will be having a little vacation. ~ Geez.
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Teddy15
Mon, 2020-07-27 16:03
Dear Geezer
I shall be on my break all month, but i am sure i shall pop my head round. I was wondering instead of also i could change it to wicked? what do you think? this was truly just an experiment but since its here i may as well play with it.
I couldn't wait lol you are busy with cooky monster, I edited slightly
Thank you...Teddy
Geezer
Mon, 2020-07-27 18:22
Cookies and tea...
I was just out making a pot of tea, to go with my oatmeal raisin cookies. yes, a great substitution. Wicked sounds more...Well, wicked. LoL ~ Geez.
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Our Chatroom is open 24/7 Feel free to use it for
keeping in touch We have poets around the world and it is fun
to have real-time conversations with those that are up
all night or on the other side of the world.
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Teddy15
Mon, 2020-07-27 18:24
lol
Thank you. Triple choc would just drive us women mad.
Thank you...Teddy
Lavender
Mon, 2020-07-27 16:13
Senryu
Hi, Teddy,
Perfect topic for a Senryu! Green-eyed Monster will definitely steal all the joy!
Thank you!
L
Teddy15
Mon, 2020-07-27 16:17
Dear lavender
Bloody jealousy, I have honestly never been, I have a sister who always was, I think most have suffered the eyes of the green one in some moment of life. But if we stand tall we can never let it hurt us.
Thank you...Teddy