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self

Clearer the thought,
deeper the soul,
more original I am,
the lonelier I become.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Last few words: 
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Rc0jyQgbxqQ&t=375s
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

chosen a different title, The one that you used, didn't seem to match the thought behind the poem. Maybe; something like
Introvert? Anyway, I can see how one could become lonelier as they look deeper into themselves, ignoring the outside world.
I am usually into short works, but this one just begs for a little more. Welcome to Neo. I know that you have been here at the site for more than a week or two, but I haven't had occasion to comment on anything you have done thus far. So again, Welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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I’ll look forward to reading what you post here.

Nice short piece... perhaps needs a bit more of something to chew on for we readers? I liked what you have there.

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