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A Selection Of Haiku's

Sunburst Cherry    
White scented blossoms
bloom, Um! So juicy and plump  
cherry opal fruits.  
Temples Of The Sun 
Tiny specks of dew
sparkle a sanctum of light
bursting with colour.
Water Feature
Silver slick water
bubbling up diamond rocks,
cinnamon sun splashed. 
Hinomaru ( "circle of the sun" )
Just before sunset
wispy clouds flame the sky red,
shadowing the hills.
Where Water Falls ( Haiku )
White water rapids 
rush over a precipice, 
wailing summer rains.
Seasons Of Plenty
Woodland blackberries,
un-picked and left to whither,
Seasons of plenty.
Slipper Lobsters 
Young slipper lobsters,
like refined crystallized glass,
minutely sculpted. 
Snatched By A Blackbird
An old dragonfly
beneath a raspberry leaf,
snatched by a blackbird. 
Scattered Moonbeams
Rainbow winged fairies
dance around midnight flowers
scattering moonbeams.
Style / type: 
Structured: Eastern
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
You can buy a Sunburst cherry tree that flowers beautiful strong scented white blossoms. Cherry opals are bright red gems.
Editing stage: 


Great selection of Haiku, just take note of the description of Haiku and Senyru.
Western poetry is given leeway to use these terms and forms, the strict 5-7-5 of the Japanese can be wavered slightly.
This one under is 6-7-4 but all the others are perfect in their syllable count, the choice of Senyru or Haiku can be in both camps..

Diamond encrusted, 6
silver slick, water running, 7
rippling shadows. 4

I find that a lot of problems come from accents and how individuals stress different parts of a word.
So you have done excellent on this group, Yours Ian.T x

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

I hope all is well with you and family!

Thanks for coming by to read and comment - much appreciated!!

I saw diamond as dia..mond ( two syllables ) - which should actually be 3 syllables and rippling as ripp..a. ling ( three syllables ) - which as you rightly say comes from the way I pronounce it. - but it should be pronounced "ripp..ling".

I've started to use a syllable count - on another poetry site ( though I haven't joined the site as a member ).

Anyway thank you soo much for your help - I've changed it now to conform to the right syllable count.

Thanks again.

Love Mand xxxx

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These are lovely Haiku I enjoyed experiencing them all, I noticed the same as Ian with the 6-7-4 ? I have been reading a lot of haiku lately I love the form and I plan to write more. You've done a great job with these

If you like cherry opals you should see some of the opals mined here in Australia I have quite a few pieces with opal my brother-in-law owns two mines so I've been lucky to get some beautiful jewelry given to me, there is a place not far from where I live that mine Black opals they really are beauties.

love and hugs JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Glad you liked this little selection! Every now and again I have a desire to write them, I'll probably add some more to the list as time goes on! Saves putting them up individually. Te he.

I've changed the "water feature" poem ( Thanks for your input ) I didn't realize how different we all see syllable count.

I've never seen a cherry opal in real life, it must be fabulous! I happened to come across a picture of them when googling gems the colour of cherries. I will google black opals to see what they look like. ( almost makes your mouth water ).

Thanks JC I really appreciate your's and everyone's help!

Love Mand xxxxx

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I'll be by to read your stack of crass haiku's me thinks they are going to be funny. Glad you liked this little selection ( which will be expanding as and when I get the urge! ).

Great of you to come by to read and comment - always good to have you aboard.

Love Mand xxxxx

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this is so so good I really enjoyed ;)

Maybe it's better to stay completely within
as fire hides in metal
as water hides in rock.

Thank you! Kind of you to make such a lovely comment - I feel greatly encouraged.

Hope to see you soon.

Love Mand xxxx

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