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SEEKING SURPRISE

Clock's alarm blares me awake.
Another planned day has begun,
with little done for pleasure's sake
each hour scheduled sun to sun.

And I drift through it like a ghost,
this day just like the one before,
not one event of which to boast.
No surprises any more.

Until week's end brings Saturday
and I wake up with a smiling face
well before the break of day
thinking about another place.

Camo on and grab my gun
jump in the truck and down the road
in a hurried race to beat the sun
to that place where I can unload.

No telling just what I might see today
in the wooded world which has no script
as I slowly make my shambling way
through woods most might think nondescript.

In a life with little unexpected
where every day's another bore
how could this old guy be dejected?
Surprise is what I've come here for.

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......to that place where I can

unload*.

I like the way you prepare the reader for your last lines.

IRiz

Thank you. I try to do that in a lot of my scribbling. It can Really come in handy when trying for humor such as in my "Sins of the Flesh". Thanks for dropping by

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