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The Second Coming

They line their lawn chairs
next to one another,
polarized shades cover their eyes,
a drink in one hand,
a pennant in the other.

Facing East,
a sunbeam blinds them
as they anticipate
the Risen Savior.

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Style / type: 
Free verse
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I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Anticipation is everything, right?
Happy Easter to you and yours, too!
Thank you!
L

author comment

savior! Put him on the mound and let him pitch his best sermon! ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

There ya go!
Thank you!
L

author comment

as they (anticipate)
did you mean
imagine....
sorry
do correct me 'tis poetry

Nope, I do believe this group was expecting or anticipating, much more than imagining.
Thank you for reading!
L

author comment

It seems I commented w/o understanding
you meant a particular group god bless em
and you too
thank q

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