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Sea of Beauty (Jan Contest)

Submitted by lovedly on Fri, 2021-01-29 15:55

Sea of beauty
lies only in some azure eyes
I 'm a cynosure of all eyes
love in my eyes
alone does lie

I never cry
lose or win
bear abuse

my eyes shed a tear
to wash off the glue
I call
Narcissism

call it what ever may you
I have azure eyes so blue
come and see me
if you wish to

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Eyes are the only mirrors of truth
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Contest: 
Out At Sea
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Lavender

Fri, 2021-01-29 18:04

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Hi, Lovedly,
My interpretation of your poem is that it is the sea speaking - the center of attention for all eyes. Such an intriguing poem - leaves me wanting to know more about the third stanza - "...the glue I call Narcissism."
Thank you!
L

lovedly

Fri, 2021-01-29 18:21

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glue you know
fluid though
sticks deep into
egoists bones
and
synapses of mind
denude
and in the admixture the fixer
who always thinks every move is a sixer
lol now
lav

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Ray Whitaker

Fri, 2021-01-29 20:10

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Narcissism is such a poor set of behaviours, and so pervasive...

Nice piece you wrote.

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lovedly

Fri, 2021-01-29 23:12

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for your review
sad narcissists are unaware
they get dissolved in glue
you know.
in the sea or river water
they drown appreciating their own reflection
amen

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Geezer

Fri, 2021-01-29 23:26

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YES!

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

lovedly

Fri, 2021-01-29 23:58

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I miss jess and thee
happy we will be at sea
lol
tc

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lovedly

Sat, 2021-01-30 11:28

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back into it
we all are cast
full mast

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lovedly

Sat, 2021-01-30 16:46

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A good return '
may you get employed by a
Ships Captain
lol

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ember

Sat, 2021-01-30 20:40

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this poem is for sure gonna be in my head for the rest of the day

post tenebras lux

lovedly

Sat, 2021-01-30 22:36

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I've read and commented on yours
GO OUT INTO
the wilderness
alone you may be
all by yourself
but never lonely
nature will accompany

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ember

Sun, 2021-01-31 00:30

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thank you for your response, it made me smile :-)

post tenebras lux

lovedly

Sun, 2021-01-31 11:05

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lol thanks

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Rula

Mon, 2021-02-01 11:54

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So many good lines here. I wish you'd trim some lines for a more profound poem.
Good one.

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lovedly

Mon, 2021-02-01 14:45

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Rula how I wish
you'd read it earlier
will miss first prize
rarely matters

now old age devours
all desires
you've read it
is all that does matter
thanks

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lovedly

Fri, 2021-02-05 18:52

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missed first prize
rarely matters

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