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SCIENCE- SOUL AND EMOTION

Submitted by lovedly on Thu, 2017-02-09 23:59

Deep thought and question

shall tackle it later

when emotion washes away

and

blood flows again

Two ways in life
for some

emotional
others
spiritual

All philosophical

Human is a plant
which moves about
tears bring forth in some

emotion

in many just a
wash!
of cleanliness

it's all in one's mind

I have no UNIVERSAL solution

Style / type: 
Free verse
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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weirdelf

Fri, 2017-04-07 07:06

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"Deep thought and question
shall tackle it later
when emotion washes away"
Wonderful opening lines.
Weirded me out a bit, close to a poem I almost wrote today, but for once in my life didn't have notebook and pen handy.

The last line is terrible. We all think that, and you know better than to use caps. If you can't say it without caps you have to find another way to say it.

In between is a good poem, worth working on.
Go for it, my dear.

cheers,
Jess
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lovedly

Fri, 2017-04-07 13:26

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when the tide ebbs
and
emotion is totally washed away
shall adhere to your directions sir

today you are w/o pen and paper
and I w/o mind
brain rests
tired day

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